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   It was nearing midnight and Jensen was preparing to make his usual escape from the house. He hadn't been caught yet, but he always prayed his father wouldn't find him out. It would basically be game over if Leroy suspected foul play on Jensen's part. Whatever could be considered fun, Leroy made sure that his son wasn't part of it. To a seventeen year-old, this was a prison sentence.

   By now, Jensen was climbing out of his window, doing his best to remain silent. Though Leroy was a heavy sleeper, Jensen didn't want to take any chances. He left the window open a crack for his return trip and headed for his parked cruiser. It was a noisy thing to start, so he'd generally let the start-up levels cycle through slowly instead of engaging thrusters at maximum right away. It only took two minutes longer and Jensen was soon flying over the house. Leroy stirred in his sleep, but nothing happened otherwise.

   Several minutes later, Jensen was hovering just above the grass in someone's backyard. He waited a moment before a female Irken emerged from the back door. Jensen opened the windshield and beckoned the girl to hop in. She smiled and thanked him when he helped her into the seat beside him. He chuckled in response before taking the cruiser to a new location. He eventually landed it on a hill just outside the city limits. The sight was a wonder to behold; the hill overlooked a cornucopia of brilliant skyscrapers and lights that littered the landscape. Above them, there were thousands of shimmering stars as far as the eye could see. Not only that, but they were bathed in violet light that could only come from Irk's moon, Plutonis. It was a calm night with the trees only occasionally swaying in the breeze. All in all, it was very peaceful.

   Jensen sighed with content as he took in what he felt was a rare moment in his life. He then turned to gaze into the girl's eyes as she stared back happily. He couldn't imagine how anyone's eyes could sparkle the way hers did. They were no different from many other Irkens', yet Jensen believed her eyes were by far the most beautiful he'd seen. Perhaps it was only because he was in love with her that he felt this way. He had realized early on that the heart saw things in a different way when it was beating for someone else. Either way, he couldn't help but smile whenever his eyes met her's.

   For a brief moment, he looked down to see her holding his hand and was unaware of when that happened. He glanced up again to see her smiling at him mischievously, batting her eyelashes slowly. He could feel his face growing hot and saw that she was blushing as well. Without warning, she pressed her lips to his with such fierceness that Jensen felt the wind get knocked out of him. It was over in an instant though as she pulled back and giggled nervously, blushing even harder. An awkward moment was what followed, and they could do nothing but stare at each other without words to fill the air. The girl bit her lip in embarrassment and Jensen simply couldn't fathom what just had happened. They had spent many a night on this hill in Jensen's cruiser, but before this night, all they had ever done was talk for hours at a time, learning all they could about the other.

   More silence ensued and right before the girl could apologize for her sudden behavior, Jensen was already kissing her back with more passion than he had ever shown anyone. Something had just felt right and he'd been waiting to do this for a long time. In response, the girl grabbed onto his neck and let herself be taken in by the impulses that the two of them could no longer ignore. They held one another tightly, kissing anywhere lips could touch skin. The intensity was overpowering and the once cool cruiser most likely felt like an inferno to them. Control seemed to disappear altogether as clothes became unnecessary and reserve was tossed aside to give way to higher priorities. The two made love until dawn was just starting to become visible…

   It was then that Jensen started up the cruiser once more and took the girl home. He gave her a quick goodbye kiss and flew off toward home as the sun began to rise over the horizon. He had wanted to do more, but he knew his father would be waking up soon.

   He made it back without a problem and climbed through the window again, shutting it quietly behind him. He took off his shoes before sleepily crawling into bed, pulling the covers up to his chin. He knew that he would only be able to sleep for an hour or so before his father would make him get up for training, but he didn't even care. After the night he had, he felt like he could take on whatever Leroy decided to throw at him, with a smile on his face at that.

                                                              Fin

                               Christina Price, Age 20, 2/15/10, Monday, 5:55 A.M.
It's extremely tame and there's only a few iffy sentences, but I thought a warning should be in place anyway. If enough people say I should remove it, I will.

Anyway, this takes place about two years after Jensen was pressured into joining his father's squad. All his life, he, like his father, has been told that you can't just be your best...you have to be the best. And to be the best, you have to focus all your attention on training and studies. And you can only do fun things if training's involved. It's one of the reasons Leroy's ex left him. Since Leroy disapproves of his son having any relationships until he's a Commander himself, Jensen has to do what all imprisoned teenagers must do: Rebel!

And that's just what he does. In this little scenario, he's been secretly going out with this girl for a while now. Her identity isn't important and it doesn't matter how they met. It'll most likely end up like all the other relationships he's had. Leroy always seems to find out and stop it before it goes too far. He just wasn't quick enough this time, but he's gonna' beat the crud out of Jensen when he does find out. And he will. :nod:

P.S: The story on Plutonis is that it was Pluto's sun at one point until the Pluuznos accidently shot it to the other end of the galaxy where it became Irk's moon, thus killing off their own kind as it became too cold to exist upon. :XD:

Self-Critique

I hope the clichés don't rot your brain, but my only background knowledge comes from whatever I've seen on TV or read in books. I like this little story though. It's probably the most romantical thing I've ever written, which also made it the most awkward thing I've ever written. I really wanted to focus more on the beauty of it than the actual actions, and I think I did okay with that. Sorry if it feels rushed because of that. As for dialogue, it wasn't needed. I thought it would take away from what I was going for. And I actually made an effort on describing scenery. I only ever add details like that if it helps the story in any way. It's why you don't get to know who the girl is. Oh, and check out mah symbolism, hehe. I didn't make the moonlight purple for any special reason, but then I remembered that purple is supposed to induce such things as creativity and imagination (romance if it's light purple), which is why I chose the title I did. I like the ending. :)

Invader Zim © Jhonen Vasquez
Jensen, Leroy, the girl, Plutonis, Pluuznos, the story © Me
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Nikki-OH Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2010
I liked it. :) But it was quite different for you to write. :XD: haha!
Nooo! Why must his father always find out? :(
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InvdrDana Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thanks. ^^ And yes, it was, definitely. XD
Because his father's a putz. I thought you'd be able to relate though. You always feel the need to escape, bwahaha! XD
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Nikki-OH Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2010
Yes. :nod:
Yes and I always do escape. bwa ha ha! :XD:
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InvdrDana Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Gotta' love to hate him though. :3

Yep. :)
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Nikki-OH Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2010
Maybe so. :XD:
:w00t:
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Zergarikiaka Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I actually loved this. XD
For a moment I just went 'how far is she going with this', but I was glad yua kept it tame. I'd have been shocked right out of my chair if you were explicit. XD
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InvdrDana Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Well, thank you! :)
Yeah, I was stumped on that myself for a while when writing it. I would've been scared myself. I just don't think all that stuff should be thrown right in people's faces. XD
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Zergarikiaka Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
XD yeah, though mostly it seems to be wether or not you'd expect something in certain people's writing or art.
8'D I mean I never expected your last violent picture. That blew my mind, and this would have done that again if you did much more. XD
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InvdrDana Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That too. XD
I think people I know in real life would be even more terrified. I only show them my cute pictures and stories. It's all they know. *_*

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